I do not believe I would have started with a loaded weapon (round chambered).
It is a bit disconcerting when you sweep the camera, your viewers, with the weapon's muzzle. It would be better if you pointed the muzzle at the table when changing positions/turning the weapon since an important firearms handling rule is: Never point the firearm at anything you don't want dead.
Other than that, not bad. Not bad at all!
Ok you asked for our opinions. I have worked is sales and marketing for 25 years so if I am a little rough here I am sorry.
Any demonstration must be felt. It must be energetic, You must be happy. = This felt very monotone and preachey
Respect comes from professional dress= Yes the shirt was a distraction and pulled away from the message
Popeye is right the presentation was flawed by the fact that a gun was being waived in our faces. But you did good showing the safety issues.
A presentation with that close of a presentation is also distorting of what you are trying to accomplish = When speaking you shoud be back away from the camera the bring forward to show the function or point of the statement. I know you do not have a camera man. Zig would volunteer I'm sure. Sorry.
Your product knowledge seemed good but I did feel it was a little rehearsed, if you were smiling and excited it would help.
Remember you are trying to convince someone that you know the best way to disassemble that Taurus. They must believe you.
MAYBE I HAVE BEEN SELLING TO LONG BUT IF YOU DO SOME OF THIS I AM SURE YOU GRADE WILL SOAR!
I LIKE THE SUBJECT MATTER.
I have to go along with these gentlemen (term used loosely) and others...yes is
clear what you wanted to accomplish. But no matter what video/camera /production
skills/procedures may be involved in your scholar's critique....you must include optimum
safety procedures at all times...many reasons...most obvious...
I know is small production...but almost any store will have dumnition...shells that load/
eject/weigh same as real ammo..but are inert...
I liked the effort in general, but things like she should have locked slide open
after round eject to show was empty etc..always keep weapon pointed down etc..
mostly stuff already said...
Generally "good" effort/result.
That said...
You are fortunate...in that I am indeed certified to critique videos...by the Big AL
Cinematic Association LLC....
As my friend...Big AL, owns a chain of theaters...you may have heard of them...
"Big Al's you rent em, I got the Private Booth " theater chain.....
So..in grading this production...
Points and score :
1
35 - Camera and video results
30 - Continuity and script and presentation
35 - Acting and Script and Editing
-99 - Gross absence of more gratuitous large chested gals and wardrobe
regards,
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